“Experience, Ground, Sky, Us, We, Mr President”
Lovely sentiment on this cold fine day.
…But turn this ground over, find the bones
of the many who do not crave the
tyranny of the few.
Hold this experience up to the sky,
see through to the other side of labor
-relentless grinding of wheels and
flesh and spirits for the few who
spend the many like coins.
Pennies left on the street
where countless boots, soles
and heels grind the pavement into dust.
Dust that chokes the breath of the many
while the few live above the din and
ash carried on the wind.
The one wind that blows our
farms, cities, oceans, plains
into deserts. Our sky has
become Our enemy;
tortured by We the people.
Roused to defend its world
from Our world.
Who can defeat the sky?
Yes we go to our homes
under one sky
– once “plum blush” now red from lust
-Our lust, the few, the many, the People
What I Thought While Listening To A Poem
25 Friday Jan 2013
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“I believe the world is beautiful
and that poetry, like bread, is for everyone.”
-Roque Dalton
expressing, what I believe to be, a similar sentiment to your own
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A sentiment with which I certainly agree. Thank you taking the time to read and comment.
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This is powerful imagery – puts into words what I feel when on the streets in NYC — such vast distance between the few and the many on each sidewalk….
Hold this experience up to the sky,
see through to the other side of labor.
Relentless grinding of wheels and
flesh and spirits for the few who
spend the many like coins.
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I agree, there is too much distance between us on so many levels. I wrote this poem after listening to the inauguration poem by Richard Blanco. It is not a criticism of his poem which is powerful and wholly appropriate to the occasion. I just felt like saying something else.
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It feels like you’ve taken the Declaration of Independence, juxtapositioned it over the Humanist Manifesto, and tried to see the sky through it… But you’ve seen, like Leo Cohen the future, brother… and it’s murder… Unfortunately you’ve looked down too, and seen through the shadow of your papers nailed to the shelter-sky still awaiting the supreme homeless, those bones of many…
I liked this expanded minimalism… Yet, it’s hard to allow yourself more words, in the short breaks of life pulling your finger nails of, one by one, again and again…
Rom
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I wrote this after listening to the inauguration poem by Richard Blanco…if you read/listen to it maybe you will tear another fingernail so perhaps I should not recommend it. As I say above it is powerful and appropriate but I want to say something else.
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Dear Ron,
I have read the inaug poem, and it is very hard to abide by the deep respect I feel for you both as a person and as a poet, in spite of the shortness of time since I’ve first read your poems and the scarceness of our literary encounters.
The reason I nevertheless do abide by it, is besides what I have just written, the respect I learned to owe onto all those who on a celebration day, from an honest heart display the hope they are entitled to…
It is not “the people” about whom I would have my say. And because this is their day, both the people and the children have the right to rejoice in the hope-bright pencil yellow of their buses…
With my unchanged friendly respect,
Rom
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Rom,
Thank you for your insight. When I posted this poem I hoped it would generate such a discussion. I appreciate your respect and return the same to you.
Hope is a many sided feeling and I respect the right of anyone to hope in what they will. As we have seen throughout history, hope is essential to the moral and psychological health of persons and The People. For me the hope is that The People will awake from their commercially induced slumber before it is too late…too late to reclaim the natural world which is requirement for our existence.
America has more and more become a land where government is of the cynical, by the cynical and for the cynical…I want to change this with all my heart for the sake of my children.
So I raise a glass to you and thank you for brightening this winter afternoon with your opinions, respect and friendship.
Ron
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Good Friend,
It took me some long minutes before I clicked “post comment” yesterday, being fully aware that the shades of my polyglotic thinking may cause a misinterpretation of what I wanted to say. Translating feelings into words is hard, and I learned the very hard way this truth, by unintentionally offending people with my intricacies…
Your reply is surely much appreciated and cherished!
For the rest, I entirely subscribe…
Rom
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quite frankly, i was underwhelmed at best by the inaugural poem. but this is lovely…powerful and honest. i would only say, with re: this: “…the many who no longer crave the / tyranny of the few” – did they ever?
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thanks ann…yes, you are right about that line, it will require a change…”the many who do not crave…” your editor’s eye is much appreciated.
ron
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eek! not me! i’ll edit your term paper! but never a poem! never! *kerouac turns in his grave…*
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i can’t believe i suggested you edited the poem…mea culpa. try to think of it as correcting a mistake…yeah that’s the ticket…it was a mistake, like a misspelling, or getting someone’s name wrong…let us call it anything other than an edit and never speak of it again.
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nothin’ to see here, folks…move it along…
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