A glass menagerie
clear crystal animals,
light filtered by
venetian blinds makes
them fluid on the wall.
Moving as if they have
something important to show us
as if we know this world
by the shadows it throws
Reading Plato
03 Saturday May 2014
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Ron, once again a very good poem. May I suggest taking out the reference to the cave line as being unnecessary and would make the ending more powerful. Best>KB
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a good call on your part KB…thanks.
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Not a problem. Though I hesitated saying something but the poem is so good. >KB
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Please do not hesitate to say whatever comes to your mind…I think that is the relationship we have?
The change is definitely an improvement.
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And likewise my friend. Best >KB
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