This is what I ask you to imagine:
The moment it begins, beneath the object of her demise.
Rising from her lover, separation into perfection.
The first question arises, the ripeness of the fruit is its answer.
Wandering the fields, hands brushing the tips of tall grass,
naming things, the fullness on the limb begging questions.
Fruit on the ground, fruit on the limb, truth, freedom,
wait to be grasped.
Yearning interlaces with the tedium of useless rain.
As their bodies brown beneath the revealing sun
the secret question draws him deeper into the embrace she
imagines in the small space within her mind, where there is
a thought about what perfection does to the soul.
Then he names it, and they see freedom in the life that surrounds them.
Then he lifts her in his arms, above his head and discovers the unbearable
lightness of her body and he names it desire. But the question still hangs in
the air and together they name it doubt, its counterweight they name prayer.
Once again he lifts her, to stretch her limb to the fruit of the limb, an end to
doubt, an answer to prayer, the end of perfection, the beginning of shame,
the discovery of pleasure, and a return to flesh as if from a ghostly existence.
Perfection exposed to error. A new reason to seek out light, with the shadow
of imperfection across their eyes the sun reveals answers, and the moon
dark secrets in the night.
The fields take on new meaning. Softness hardens to labor. Independence
grows from furrowed ground, new life hard won from pain.
Yearning now interlaces with the coming rain, doubt and prayer; and when
the heavens open, he holds out his limbs, and she drinks with sweet release
from the cup of his calloused hands.
Painting Creation of Eve by Bartolo De Fredi
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OMG, and I mean it! Absolutely stunning, subtle, velvety, like a slow motion ballet of an absolute dedication to the purest form of what love should, must be. Moving! Congratulations Ron!
if they had known how it would turn out… it must have been so tough for them… the separation from god – the sin that came with it – the trouble with their sons… i bet they would’ve loved to turn back the clock
what a hard moment of knowing…right after they took that bite and their eyes were opened…imagine all the fear and emotion that crashed into them….that they would choose a life not of perfection as well is a startling thought…
I think something was gained by the understanding as well… and an embrace with calloused hands ain’t half bad… Just sitting there being fed, sounds a little boring to me… thank you for the great choice.
I like to think of the expulsion as the emancipation, the first gasp of choice, or will, of independent thought, of being fully connected to all that is; you adopted a passive voice for the piece, letting us either reinforce our religiosity, or our more subtle metaphysical searches for our own answers, our piece of the puzzle, a tiny shred of the big Truth; a marvelously well-written, well thought out piece, brother.
This is deeply felt – very impressive work and consistently sustained throughout with lots of strongly measured lines – my own particular favourite is an early one: ‘The first question arises, the ripeness of the fruit is its answer.’ and you didn’t let me down from there…
Ron, this is a very well crafted poem. I reflect on the idea of “Perfection exposed to error” which resonates with me. Even though the Garden was perfect, it could not withstand the error of human ways. I wonder if the Independence proved to be worth it.
A thought-provoking perspective on such a well-known ‘story’. We rarely imagine what it must have been like for Adam and Eve, the individuals, after they ate the fruit.
The discovery of pleasure associated with sin is an interesting concept. Perfection does sound unappealing with its lack of variety.Humanity is flawed and ugly but it serves a purpose in heightening the good bits by contrast 🙂
OMG, and I mean it! Absolutely stunning, subtle, velvety, like a slow motion ballet of an absolute dedication to the purest form of what love should, must be. Moving! Congratulations Ron!
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i concur…couldn’t say it any better than that. just stunning.
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if they had known how it would turn out… it must have been so tough for them… the separation from god – the sin that came with it – the trouble with their sons… i bet they would’ve loved to turn back the clock
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Lush and beautiful interpretation ~ One of your best work ~
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what a hard moment of knowing…right after they took that bite and their eyes were opened…imagine all the fear and emotion that crashed into them….that they would choose a life not of perfection as well is a startling thought…
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I thought this a very good vision of the whole business of desire, doubt, prefection and flesh. Well thought out and executed. >KB
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Thank you KB…appreciate it very much.
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I think something was gained by the understanding as well… and an embrace with calloused hands ain’t half bad… Just sitting there being fed, sounds a little boring to me… thank you for the great choice.
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Amen to that brother.
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I like to think of the expulsion as the emancipation, the first gasp of choice, or will, of independent thought, of being fully connected to all that is; you adopted a passive voice for the piece, letting us either reinforce our religiosity, or our more subtle metaphysical searches for our own answers, our piece of the puzzle, a tiny shred of the big Truth; a marvelously well-written, well thought out piece, brother.
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Ron, it’s all well done, and I especially admire this line: Yearning interlaces with the tedium of useless rain. ~
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This is deeply felt – very impressive work and consistently sustained throughout with lots of strongly measured lines – my own particular favourite is an early one: ‘The first question arises, the ripeness of the fruit is its answer.’ and you didn’t let me down from there…
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Ron, this is a very well crafted poem. I reflect on the idea of “Perfection exposed to error” which resonates with me. Even though the Garden was perfect, it could not withstand the error of human ways. I wonder if the Independence proved to be worth it.
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A thought-provoking perspective on such a well-known ‘story’. We rarely imagine what it must have been like for Adam and Eve, the individuals, after they ate the fruit.
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The discovery of pleasure associated with sin is an interesting concept. Perfection does sound unappealing with its lack of variety.Humanity is flawed and ugly but it serves a purpose in heightening the good bits by contrast 🙂
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Ahh..the birth of knowledge in love
a most complex
and difficult road to come..
to forget and love..
is sure
LY
\bliss..
again…
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Very sensual. I always think of Eve picking the fruit to feed her family. And now you made me think about the snake as a romantic male symbol.
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“this is what i ask you to imagine…”
such a beautiful invitation to this stunning piece, so much to contemplate.
thank you!
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Breathtaking!
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Thank you Brenda.
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